Rewriting the Chorus to Complete the Song

Hear the Rough Draft...

I Needed to See the Entire Picture

Looking at a song from a step back is important.  That way you can see if everything is going to flow well and feel complete.  This song didn't feel complete with the chorus lyrics I had originally intended, so I had to recycle the chorus and use it for a bridge and then add a new chorus.

In one of the songwriting books I read, it was suggested that you limit any use of existing cliches.  This guards your lyrics from being predictable and meaningless.  However, the author went on to explain that many songwriters are cliche creators.  So, it's o.k. to have cliche sounding lines in your song, if these are original phrases.  I wanted the chorus to sound cliche'ish without using any real cliches.

My client ask me to focus the song to say that the everyday love he gets from his wife is important in his life.  The first two lines of the chorus are meant to reinforce the verses.  Then the chorus ends with two lines that say that their time together is what these two cherish the most.  I kept it in past tense to match the rest of the song, but it might be cool to change to present tense on the chorus.

Here are the new chorus lyrics:

Seeing you was enough for me to love
And I saw you every day in my mind
Being with you has always been my gift
You gave me love and you were kind

The next step is to get approval from my client to go ahead and develop this rough draft into a more polished and well arranged song and start recording. 

This medium tempo rock ballad style could end up very expressive once everything is put together.  Instrumentation should stay fairly simple, and the song should build up to the chorus from quieter verses.

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